I want to rewrite the third part of my prologue and all of Chapter Four (as well as other little bits). I want to insert a more fairy tale tone into some of it, and have Tenley more taken in …
‘Kaya and Sayuri froze, but Madame Lumina had had just about enough of this nonsense.’ Yeah… that sentence looks a bit awkward to me. It’s the ‘had had’, although it is something people would say it kind of looks odd …
