The edits I want to make to Aserion already are – well, there’s quite a few. I think the main ones right now are at the end of chapter four we need more of Kaya’s thought processes and well as Jen’s discomfort at the idea of going out to meet people in town just to be sociable. And in chapter seven we should see more of her discomfort too via Sayuri making observations about her.
Maybe I won’t do those right away though, as it probably is best to get all the story down rather than continually edit things as I go. I’ll make a note and improve those scenes in the next draft.